samnshawn111 (samnshawn111) wrote in poetry_orgy,
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The Night

I wrote this poem last summer... I am just wanting to know if you think it is good or not... I think it is a really good poem... please give me feedback...

The Night

We held hands, under the full moon of August.
Watching as the smoke rolled off our lips,
I took another hit and I went spiraling down, into the blackness of eternity.
You could not grasp my hand and began to fall with me.
We fell into the night, All the hate we had before had vanished,
We were left with the peace and serenity of haste.
As we tried to find out way out we got lost,
We separated and you could not keep hold of my hand.
I lost my way and started falling…
Tripping over tree stumps and dead branches, always straightening after a fall.
You found me there lying in the churned up leaves,
Bleeding, a blackness into the earth.
You carried me, and the weight that I carried disappeared into the trees.
Suddenly there came a light, from a source unattainable,
We ran towards it, not reaching it, but we could almost grasp a glimpse as it faded.
You became worried and I could not help but cry out,
No one heard and we spiraled down again.
We stopped and grasped on to a nearby branch,
We pulled our selves out just to see that we had not moved.
You carried me to the car, that night, as we prepared to venture home, on these dark streets of Newburgh.
We barely made it, but no one noticed us missing...
It was almost three when you laid down with me,
We slept till the sun came up...
The next morning, it all seemed unbelievable.
The stories we told reminded me of a vivid dream.
All the thoughts we had about that night slowly faded like the light into the darkness…
Then we spiraled out of control in to a dead forest, with leaves covering the floor.
This time you did not let go,
As we ran through the forest away from a monster we could not see…
We fell into a hole dug for two we could not escape as it seemed we were being buried,
Being covered up with dirt, so that no one could see our bodies…
No one told me this would be the end, No one said I had died, so I tried to fight it.
You jus sat back and stared as I struggled to find a way out of this hell.
You started to cry as you realized the truth, but I could not believe this was the end.
I stopped in order to comfort you, but the dirt kept falling heavier and heavier.
No one seemed to notice we were still alive,
Until a man walked up, and the dirt mysteriously stopped falling,
He wore a cloak of darkness and two eyes that seemed to glow,
I did not want this man here, but you said it would be alright,
So we went with him…
He took us to the place we came from,
He held my hand as I started to cry.
You could not comfort these tears… They were the tears of the unborn…
I suddenly realized we had to be dead, and I fell…
I did not wake up as the earth covered me,
I only fell heavier and heavier into the black abyss of death,
You cried.
...copyrighted 2005...
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